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Posted By: Inwë Oct 18, 2004 - 10:12 am

Kilen shouted and ran out to meet his old friend.
“Welcome, Inwë, may the sun shine on our meeting.”
"Hello, Kilen, good to see you again!"
The old friends embraced heartily.
Inwë turned towards the jailer, “We’re going to stay here overnight. This is Kilen, he’ll be coming with us tomorrow morning.”
He turned back to the old wizard, “Kilen, this is…erm…”
"Tan"

What do you think?

Posted By: T_Tibke Oct 21, 2004 - 03:04 pm

I'm just curious at this. Are you going to write this whole story, paragraph by paragraph? Awaiting critique after each post you make? I am sure that it will take you quite some time to accomplish, if this is what you seek.

Posted By: Inwë Nov 11, 2004 - 10:17 am

Here's another bit, a bit more this time.
Do you like the name?

Kilen shouted and ran out to meet his old friend.
“Welcome, Inwë, may the sun shine on our meeting.”
“Why do you always say that?”
“It makes me sound clever.”
“Actually, it just makes you seem even more stupid.”
Inwë turned towards the jailer, “We’re going to stay here overnight. This is Kilen, he’ll be coming with us tomorrow morning.”
He turned back to the old wizard, “Kilen, this is…erm…”
“Lan.”
“Lan?”
“Lan.”
“Kilen, this is Lan, the jailer who so kindly let me out of a jail cell.”
“Kindly? You kicked me against a wall!”
“Details, details.”

Lan rolled restlessly back and forth. Something was annoying him, something didn’t add up. Why would Inwë want him as a travelling companion when he could quite easily kill Inwë in his sleep anytime? Why was Inwë taking Lan with him? It was strange. He had to get away.

Inwë woke with a start and leapt up out of bed. He looked over at the other bed. It was empty! He quickly pulled his jacket on and ran out into the hall. Nobody was there, but there was a draught to his left and he turned to see an open window. “••••!” he shouted. Inwë was about to turn away when he saw a blue flash through the trees. He leapt out of the window, slammed into the ground and rolled to a stop. He got up and sprinted to the trees. He saw another flash and continued into the trees.

Lan fell heavily onto his back once more. The creature stood over him and screamed into the night. A mighty hand reached down to grab him. A small door seemed to open in his mind and he suddenly knew that this was an Aruzbilgim. With this knowledge came words in a tongue unknown to him and they slipped off his tongue as if he had known them all his life. “Taþawenûmâz Nâzenærûs Tacharôzê Phašaigalâm Šanedelgûn Alurruš Iðâraikad Ebôchâr Inâra Šânedenarruš Tâzelušorruš Edebruš Ošezel Anâraišur Šaþayarrûs Nâruš Oššošân Mawirayarrumâz!”

Inwë ran into a clearing just in time to see the creature fly backwards into a tree trunk and sunder into millions of pieces. Lan started falling backwards and Inwë went to catch him. He had a strange look on his face and his eyes had no colour or pupils. He needed help - Kilen would know what to do.

“Is he alright?” Inwë looked worried as he peered into Kilen’s face as if the answer were there.
“He’s still unconscious, but,” seeing the horror on Inwë’s face, he quickly continued, “He should wake in about two days or so.”
Inwë flopped into a chair, exhausted with worry, and sighed with relief. “Don’t worry, lad, he’ll be alright.” It seemed strange for Kilen to call someone twice as old as him ‘lad’, but elves are considered young until one hundred and fifty years old!

“Why did you really bring me with you?”
Lan was lying in bed talking to Inwë sitting next to him on a high stool.
“I already told you.”
“That was a lie. After what I went through last night, surely you can tell me now I know something strange is going on.”
“Alright, I’m not meant to tell you until the Gathering, but I’ll tell you because you deserve it.”
“Well, tell me.”
Inwë shifted uncertainly on his stool, stood up and started pacing up and down at the foot of the bed.
* * *

Posted By: Inwë Nov 11, 2004 - 10:19 am

Sorry 'bout that Master! Please don't kill me!

Posted By: Bmat Nov 11, 2004 - 10:40 am

You have a sprightly, fun way of writing, and I enjoy what I read. The excerpt above is a bit disjointed. - that is, the paragraphs don't really seem to follow each other, especially the first few.

Posted By: Inwë Nov 14, 2004 - 11:22 am

I'm really not sure how to carry on now.

Posted By: Inwë Nov 14, 2004 - 11:26 am

I think either Lan's grandfather destroyed evil army now returned or Lan part of prophecy.

Posted By: Inwë Nov 28, 2004 - 08:16 am

Hello? (Empty whistling)