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by tiriel
Tue Sep 09, 2008 11:48 am
Forum: Off Topic Conversations
Topic: stupid question game
Replies: 2359
Views: 263457

Re: stupid question game

Yep. Then they get swat.

What wears sailors clothing and sails but isn't a sailor?
by tiriel
Sun May 25, 2008 6:26 am
Forum: Lycoria: The Stories
Topic: Jaded Wayfarer Inn
Replies: 523
Views: 175981

"Boy."

It was too dark to see his face, but there was a man sitting on a chair in the corner with his hood drawn about his face.

"Over here."
by tiriel
Thu May 22, 2008 7:13 am
Forum: Lycoria: The Stories
Topic: Jaded Wayfarer Inn
Replies: 523
Views: 175981

Kit Mallory entered the inn. No one saw him. No one ever did. That was his skill, that was his talent. That was what kept him alive. Kit, as an assassin, didn't bother with the usual trimmings and frills that your usual mercenary did. He didn't wear the typical uniform of a spy or a ninja, didn't ca...
by tiriel
Thu May 08, 2008 2:08 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: james potter and the dark lord reborn
Replies: 5
Views: 4969

Ch 2 Apocalypse So together they went, and together they would stay for the entirety of James’s schooling years. But this is not to say that they didn’t have their difficulties! Little did we know that James and Salem were about to embark on a series of adventures that would change the face of their...
by tiriel
Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:08 am
Forum: Guidelines for Writing
Topic: Universal Story Outline
Replies: 4
Views: 7967

Leave the chronological format to the actually story. Explain the intertwining story lines separately, then explain how they fit together. This way the reader will get a more "flash card" pop-bang explanation rather than a summary that he's constantly trying to piece together in his head. :wink:
by tiriel
Wed Apr 30, 2008 7:52 am
Forum: Guidelines for Writing
Topic: How to describe a war
Replies: 7
Views: 11088

You should try reading some poetry from the world wars. There were quite a few poets that made it big post war. It might give your fight scenes that realistic edge you're looking for.
by tiriel
Tue Apr 29, 2008 3:27 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: New Part to an old story, under an old name
Replies: 8
Views: 5126

Much of this seems to be "shaken and not stirred," where stirred would be the preferred measure.. Words such as "plonk" may not be characteristic of that which they wish to describe. Sometimes I find myself making up new words if an old wont suffice. remember* Shakespeare developed 75 000 words hims...
by tiriel
Tue Apr 29, 2008 3:00 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: Chapter from Book A.T.P. please advise
Replies: 15
Views: 15117

writing, like any product of culture, needs regular pruning. I find that in writing there are many cliche redundancies in description. like this example: "and she soaked in the long forgotten details of her surroundings." It's both ambiguous and acting like a damn in the river. Some call these plot ...
by tiriel
Tue Apr 29, 2008 12:35 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: james potter and the dark lord reborn
Replies: 5
Views: 4969

Preamble Pain, anguish, fear, sorrow, regret. There was nothing else. Searching, searching. Where was the cure? He searched for what seemed like aeons. Slimed his way through the pain of the lowliest of lows, scraped his being upon the highest peaks of his jagged regrets. Suddenly he was gaining pac...
by tiriel
Tue Apr 29, 2008 12:12 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: New Part to an old story, under an old name
Replies: 8
Views: 5126

I find that rearranging a sentence or even changing one word will reveal whole new meaning, like a transformer changing form from truck to, well, you get what I mean. You need to refine your own personal grasp on punctuation. you seem to have a fair grasp on their traditional applications. A compoun...
by tiriel
Fri Nov 23, 2007 5:09 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: james potter and the dark lord reborn
Replies: 5
Views: 4969

but i hate startrek!!
by tiriel
Fri Nov 23, 2007 4:25 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: james potter and the dark lord reborn
Replies: 5
Views: 4969

james potter and the dark lord reborn

this is sumthin im writing for an individual project for uni :)

[Edited. Fanfiction. Magus.]


ill edit it and bring more when i write it :)