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Within the castle’s adamantine heart, below the place where shadows start, Lost in the gloom of cryptic light, beyond the power of normal sight, A chamber wrought with long lost lore - the statue of the Manticore; His visage fine, that look sublime, epitome of an ancient line. But Chronos with relen...
I think perhaps you are mixing up eulogy with elegy – the former is a formal poem of praise – the latter is the dirge – although Gray’s elegy is not really mournful – just brilliant¡! I do like the Zoolander pronunciation though – I think it ought to be formally adopted¡! I like the poem – good atte...
- Fri Dec 23, 2005 4:11 am
- Forum: Critique and Advice
- Topic: Extract, need opinions.
- Replies: 8
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I agree with just about everything Aldan has mentioned – especially the dry humours quality of the story! Very well done! The only minor point I would mention is ‘upturned’ – a perfectly good word and usually one rather than hyphenated… I very much look forward to reading the whole story¡!
- Thu Dec 22, 2005 10:00 pm
- Forum: General Writing Discussion
- Topic: A little help for the place of information in my trilogy
- Replies: 29
- Views: 17308
I think Neurolanis’s idea is by far the best – you can have a chunk to get the reader started – but it is really great to read a story where the details are slowly added, giving the world a constant enrichment as the main plot/s unfold. One thing I do hate in this area though – and I think it ruins ...
- Wed Dec 21, 2005 6:54 pm
- Forum: Sci-Fi and Fantasy General Discussions
- Topic: Some help with botany?
- Replies: 7
- Views: 7522
The basic requirement for plants is the u/v component – if you have the same amount +- 20% you could have most any type of earth flora – if the u/v is significantly lower, then I would suggest the plants have much larger leaf/green area to compensate. If it is higher then you would expect some filte...
Wal-lar the wizard wields his wand and rends the veil asunder, And there at last before his eyes, the rapaciously coveted plunder. The lambent limb of eldritch lore, a shining shaft supreme, The sylvan Elfin Staff of Staves, a dream beyond his dream. With avaricious azure eyes he gazes on the glamou...
- Wed Dec 21, 2005 2:47 pm
- Forum: Suggestions and Ideas
- Topic: Need ideas for epic poem
- Replies: 27
- Views: 26046
I am nearing the end of a science fiction/fantasy crossover in rhyme… although it has been a lot more than six months and I haven’t counted the lines – 12,000 words-ish – I really like rhyme but it has been an uphill battle… think twice before you embark on a decent into a maelstrom of mind muddling...
I love limericks too – I have written quite a few… my favourite classic (not mine) is: The arms of a barmaid in Yale Were tattooed with the price of the ale, And on her behind – For use of the blind, Was the same information in Braille! Two of my own: After churning a cheese in Caerphilly A maid mad...