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by spknoevl
Thu Feb 25, 2010 3:17 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Chapter 3 of Kuhlain's Quest
Replies: 7
Views: 3533

Re: Chapter 3 of Kuhlain's Quest

Very nicely done.
by spknoevl
Tue Feb 09, 2010 11:18 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Islands: Queens Isle Prologue
Replies: 2
Views: 2012

Re: Islands: Queens Isle Prologue

If this is merely a prologue you need to shorten it and make it more concise. Also, I would eliminate the first paragraph showing the landing from the native's point of view. You're best best would probably be to shorten the whole thing to just a few paragraphs that flow together more naturally and ...
by spknoevl
Tue Feb 09, 2010 11:12 am
Forum: General Writing Discussion
Topic: Chemicals that provide an immediate strength boost.
Replies: 7
Views: 7648

Re: Chemicals that provide an immediate strength boost.

Maybe you could just invent a plant or chemical to give your character the boost he needs; you're not really limited to the real world.
by spknoevl
Mon Jan 25, 2010 2:20 pm
Forum: General Writing Discussion
Topic: Diminsional Probability
Replies: 12
Views: 12275

Re: Diminsional Probability

Since many physicists these days have postulated that there are in fact 9 dimensions or planes of reality all sitting on one another, some sort of rift between dimensions would probably work. You could perhaps have some kind of natural event cause the rift at any time in earth's history that worked ...
by spknoevl
Wed Jan 13, 2010 8:54 am
Forum: Television
Topic: Fringe
Replies: 1
Views: 3798

Fringe

Anyone else into this show? It's slowly been growing on me since the second half of last season.
by spknoevl
Wed Jan 13, 2010 8:45 am
Forum: General Writing Discussion
Topic: I figured something out
Replies: 11
Views: 10386

Re: I figured something out

Strangely enough, I do most of my writing while at work since I find there are too many distractions at home. I've read that John Grisham and Terry Brooks used to come in to work early to write before they were successful authors. Hopefully none of my co-workers post here.
by spknoevl
Mon Jan 04, 2010 8:34 am
Forum: Movies
Topic: Avatar [2009]
Replies: 23
Views: 14193

Re: Avatar [2009]

I found the Fern Gully comparisons pretty accurate - I kept thinking I had seen much of this before, albeit without the next generation computer graphics. I've read that Cameron originally planned this a part of a trilogy and a second film is already in the works.
by spknoevl
Thu Dec 03, 2009 2:08 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Chapter 2 - edited Caught in the Storm
Replies: 1
Views: 1723

Re: Chapter 2 - edited Caught in the Storm

I think the storyline is much more dramatic now than before. I'm glad you liked my suggestions. I still feel you could embellish his struggle through the storm even further, but that comes down to writing styles after a certain point. Some authors can fill pages with a simple journey like that, whil...
by spknoevl
Thu Dec 03, 2009 11:10 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Chapter 2 of my Fantasy
Replies: 2
Views: 2030

Re: Chapter 2 of my Fantasy

The piece is pretty well written and I will only offer up a few suggestions that might improve the flow and possibly make the story more entertaining. With the first paragraph I would suggest changing the last sentence to something more along the lines of: " He bounced it on his shoulders in an...
by spknoevl
Tue Aug 18, 2009 10:33 am
Forum: Recommended Reading
Topic: The Innocent Mage - Kingmaker/Kingbreaker
Replies: 1
Views: 3964

The Innocent Mage - Kingmaker/Kingbreaker

Been reading this book by Karen Miller (also known as K.E. Mills) and found it a great read. This is her first novel and I'm already looking to pickup the sequel, The Awakened Mage. If you're looking for a lot of battles and action you should probably look elsewhere, but good storyline and excellent...
by spknoevl
Tue Aug 18, 2009 10:30 am
Forum: Recommended Reading
Topic: Brandon Sanderson- ELANTRIS
Replies: 7
Views: 7364

Re: Brandon Sanderson- ELANTRIS

Just recently finished the book and have to agree it was well written, with good character development and an interesting storyline. Kind of a cross between fantasy and sci-fi, but well worth picking up.
by spknoevl
Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:11 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: need help with this bit
Replies: 8
Views: 4063

Re: need help with this bit

I think the scene would work better if you had your character come into the scene earlier and discuss the various points of the building as he encounters them ie: Xaviar passed the statue of the Minotaur; and Xaviar pulled up to the large house; the building so large it had a ridiculous amount of ba...