Speculative Vision

So, in the end, it's really a very personal, intuitive thing. A question of personal opinion and feeling rather than scientific method.

Does time exist without matter? If a tree falls in a forest with no one to hear it, does it simply stand back up again?

Caltana, You seem to need some help with your punctuation and structure. I'm no expert, but here are a few suggestions from your intro. Sorry if there are any errors in my feedback: if there are, hopefully someone with more skill will come and correct me, and we'll all learn something! "How ironic I...

Oooo... Titbit! You said Tit! As in Blue-tit, or... Coal-tit, or... Great-tit (don't want to get in trouble with the mods thinking I'm rude or anything). Hornythology... it's the only way forward. Now... Wow, great feedback there! I have nothing to add, only... didn't Morgan enter the hall twice wit...

This had the best first line I've read in ages. The introduction that followed, concerning the senses was very, very funny, but I thought it might have been just a little too long to support the humour right through it. Purely personal. The story was a good giggle, wandering from humorous to downrig...

The death of the unknown soldier huh? Jim would be proud of you! This piece was, as mentioned, well paced - not rushed at all. Despite the fantasy setting, it had the flexibility to be easily transferred to any genre; sf, historical, etc - which is a sure sign of a solid, realistic piece. The horror...

An unread post of this quality - that simply won't do. Let me be the second to congratulate you. Excellent, excellent atmosphere - and the attention to detail really did it for me. Scary stuff. The ending I found very, very funny. Was I meant to? I guess it's my own sense of humour, but I imagined t...

Great short story Magus. A few corrections possibly needed. But as you haven't mentioned, I'm sure you're not concerned? Good description, it made me feel cold, and I especially liked the blood snowflakes (but agree about the exclamation marks.) For an extra twist, or simply more intrigue, you could...

Power corrupts, and ultimate power corrupts ultimately. This had the feel of an ancient Greek tale, Homeric almost. And the twist was excellent. Very good, and I liked it a lot. A few points I spotted: "The evil Dark Lord Plorgon Hai had fallen by Jenovius’ hand, and so too had the Dark Empire crumb...

Here’s an example of what I would do if I was to quickly edit your piece. I’m no expert. I also have an addiction to commas, and my wife helps remove them and edit my writing. Also, you might not like my style. Let me know. “It was pouring down with rain and the thunder was booming in the sky overhe...

That level of feedback requires a lot of effort, and I'm sulking because I posted asking for as little as opinion and no one has bothered.

Why do I bother?!?

Only joking

I've had a stab at this... please don't be offended?!? What I've tried to do is make the piece flow more easily, and drag you along in a logical order. I really wish I had the skills to communicate more effectively what I've done, but I simply make it a bit more pleasing to myself. So, apologies if ...