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by MainComputer
Sat Nov 26, 2005 6:00 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Introductory Prose: Do You Want To Know...
Replies: 21
Views: 12742

Wow. aldan – thanks. Amazing feedback much appreciated. I hope others feel as disconnected from the narrative as you did, because that was one of the main effects I was trying to attain. The story takes a completely different turn from this piece of prose onwards, and I did want the reader to feel d...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 5:49 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: "Digger"
Replies: 18
Views: 11134

Great read. Predictable, but none the worse for it. I might have gone for a more violent murder myself, something more over-the-top, or something more spur of the moment. Maybe this would add the unexpected edge? Really enjoyed it though. Tops. My pitiful, purely personal idiosyncrasies: -Paragraph ...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 5:00 pm
Forum: Speculation
Topic: Time Travel Theories
Replies: 16
Views: 16044

Memory erasing is a good point to challenge my theory. Two points though. 1) Many of the people coming back would be coming for malicious reasons, so you'd need "time police" to erase memories, and police are reliably unreliable. 2) One single mistake, from a potentially huge amount of visits from t...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 4:46 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Introductory Prose: Do You Want To Know...
Replies: 21
Views: 12742

P.S. You're correct, of course. I've changed "kid's eyes" to "his eyes". It was over-used anyhow.

Thanks.
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 4:43 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Introductory Prose: Do You Want To Know...
Replies: 21
Views: 12742

Many thanks, but my mom did help me with it. It goes downhill from here though! I have quite a chunk of writing that I'd love to share and receive comments on, but I will do my very best to release it slowly onto the forum (no more than one post per week or two). I write and rewrite and rewrite, so ...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 2:17 pm
Forum: Speculation
Topic: Time Travel Theories
Replies: 16
Views: 16044

Time Travel Theories

Here's my personal theory on why time travel can never exist, and why I avoid it in my writing. All comments welcome. Lets call today, day X. And the very final moment of time, the end of all things, lets call that day Z. The time between X and Z is most probably so long, we might as well call it an...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 2:00 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Introductory Prose: Do You Want To Know...
Replies: 21
Views: 12742

Introductory Prose: Do You Want To Know...

Hi, this is my first creative post here. I'm gonna paste the introductory piece of prose for a story I'm working on, and I'd love your feedback. I'm looking for comments on my accomplishment of atmosphere, and my grammar and structure. Not sure how to approach this yet, but for now I'll promise to g...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 10:40 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: "The Tommyknocker Man"
Replies: 16
Views: 9919

Thoughts of a Christmas Carol… I liked the classical tone to this, mixed with the modern, punchy structure. The third paragraph did build tension well, but the sentences were a bit too short for me, so early in the narrative. Loved the use of nursery rhymes, and you’ll hate me for this, but some of ...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 10:36 am
Forum: Speculation
Topic: Here's a thought...
Replies: 2
Views: 4178

Nail on the head...

...it sells. Yes. The malevolence is always so flimsy and without motivation however, and is always limited by our own biological motivations imposed on a non-biological entity. There can be a story here I believe, with a benevolent force that is. Several stories. How would the entity attain dominan...
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 9:25 am
Forum: Speculation
Topic: Here's a thought...
Replies: 2
Views: 4178

Here's a thought...

If a Jupiter Brain ever took control of our existences, why wouldn't it be benevolent, and why is it nearly always portrayed as a malevolent force in SF?
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 9:22 am
Forum: Speculation
Topic: Dysonsphere
Replies: 8
Views: 8435

Innocence is wonderful

Innocently, you've just identified one of the main subjects of the story I'm attempting to write. For me, the big question is "what would happen if we all found out?"

Curiously enough, my Physics teacher was called Dyson.
by MainComputer
Fri Nov 25, 2005 8:35 am
Forum: Meet and Greet
Topic: Finally he's here! It's Nathan Jones!
Replies: 7
Views: 3586

Finally he's here! It's Nathan Jones!

Hello kind and loverly people! Big kiss to you all. I am Nathan Jones, and I have just joined your spiffing site. I'm here with an ulterior motive, but I'm prepared to do the hard labour first. As every bugger seems to be, I am trying to write a novel. Yes, I know - poor soul. Therefore, I have come...