Speculative Vision

Wow. aldan – thanks. Amazing feedback much appreciated. I hope others feel as disconnected from the narrative as you did, because that was one of the main effects I was trying to attain. The story takes a completely different turn from this piece of prose onwards, and I did want the reader to feel d...

Great read. Predictable, but none the worse for it. I might have gone for a more violent murder myself, something more over-the-top, or something more spur of the moment. Maybe this would add the unexpected edge? Really enjoyed it though. Tops. My pitiful, purely personal idiosyncrasies: -Paragraph ...

Memory erasing is a good point to challenge my theory. Two points though. 1) Many of the people coming back would be coming for malicious reasons, so you'd need "time police" to erase memories, and police are reliably unreliable. 2) One single mistake, from a potentially huge amount of visits from t...

P.S. You're correct, of course. I've changed "kid's eyes" to "his eyes". It was over-used anyhow.

Thanks.

Many thanks, but my mom did help me with it. It goes downhill from here though! I have quite a chunk of writing that I'd love to share and receive comments on, but I will do my very best to release it slowly onto the forum (no more than one post per week or two). I write and rewrite and rewrite, so ...

Here's my personal theory on why time travel can never exist, and why I avoid it in my writing. All comments welcome. Lets call today, day X. And the very final moment of time, the end of all things, lets call that day Z. The time between X and Z is most probably so long, we might as well call it an...

Hi, this is my first creative post here. I'm gonna paste the introductory piece of prose for a story I'm working on, and I'd love your feedback. I'm looking for comments on my accomplishment of atmosphere, and my grammar and structure. Not sure how to approach this yet, but for now I'll promise to g...

Thoughts of a Christmas Carol… I liked the classical tone to this, mixed with the modern, punchy structure. The third paragraph did build tension well, but the sentences were a bit too short for me, so early in the narrative. Loved the use of nursery rhymes, and you’ll hate me for this, but some of ...

...it sells. Yes. The malevolence is always so flimsy and without motivation however, and is always limited by our own biological motivations imposed on a non-biological entity. There can be a story here I believe, with a benevolent force that is. Several stories. How would the entity attain dominan...

If a Jupiter Brain ever took control of our existences, why wouldn't it be benevolent, and why is it nearly always portrayed as a malevolent force in SF?

Innocently, you've just identified one of the main subjects of the story I'm attempting to write. For me, the big question is "what would happen if we all found out?"

Curiously enough, my Physics teacher was called Dyson.

Hello kind and loverly people! Big kiss to you all. I am Nathan Jones, and I have just joined your spiffing site. I'm here with an ulterior motive, but I'm prepared to do the hard labour first. As every bugger seems to be, I am trying to write a novel. Yes, I know - poor soul. Therefore, I have come...