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by SFNovelwriter
Tue Feb 21, 2006 8:08 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: I hate being Shy!
Replies: 3
Views: 2425

I hate being Shy!

I whipped this one up today hope it makes a few of you smile. I hate being shy! I dare not stare But I can’t help myself and I do anyway I’m busted, as he turns, and looks my way He smiles in the moment But I panic and glance away I’m mortified that I’m caught But then again I’m not! I flush crimson...
by SFNovelwriter
Thu Feb 16, 2006 8:22 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: Broken Inside:
Replies: 2
Views: 1802

Broken Inside:

Broken Inside When smiles turn to frowns Like the funeral of a clown And tears run like rain Leaving black tracks of pain Upon a porcelain, pale, face Until only a bitter, salty taste Is all that can possibly remain When you’re broken inside All your fears Descend at once You cannot run, you cannot ...
by SFNovelwriter
Thu Feb 16, 2006 7:08 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: My little dog
Replies: 4
Views: 2494

Evil Comes in many forms!

Written in the spirt of Steven King! The Witch or the mad person who's bet has gone lost! Wow gives us pause to think about all those lost souls who have animals that they control! Wow great stuff, less umm of course if you have such a pet!
by SFNovelwriter
Thu Feb 16, 2006 7:05 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: What is on my Mind?
Replies: 12
Views: 7150

Powerful Lines

Though incomplete you have some powerful lines in this poem!
"He comes before me with a presence no smaller than an ocean" What a heck of a line! Please complete it, so we can take it all in. Or cut it loose and let us play with it! Great stuff.
by SFNovelwriter
Sat Feb 11, 2006 4:39 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: He digs me
Replies: 1
Views: 1506

He digs me

He Digs Me My heart beats fast From just one glance I feel all warm and giddy I think he digs me. To hear my name Roll from his lips Brings a certain smile I think he needs To see some more I think he digs me A single touch Is not very much But it brings a shiver Not a shiver of cold A shiver of the...
by SFNovelwriter
Sat Feb 11, 2006 4:04 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: Like the Rain
Replies: 1
Views: 1507

Like the Rain

Well since it’s getting near St. V’s day I figured It’s time to devote some words to love, both new and lost! Hope you enjoy! Like the rain I fall upon my knees My heart clutched in grief For that which I have lost Never again shall our lips meet In loves sweet caress Never again shall our bodies jo...
by SFNovelwriter
Sat Feb 11, 2006 3:45 pm
Forum: Theatre of the Mind
Topic: Muddy Boots
Replies: 9
Views: 8901

Hello

I'm with the others, it was good, and well written!
Good job!!!
by SFNovelwriter
Thu Feb 09, 2006 2:55 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Ch 18 - Revenge, Change and Grief (Hard Critique on Action)
Replies: 3
Views: 4191

See it this helps any.

Hello please forgive my grammar! I sat down and tried to give this beginning a big more pizzaz and make it more suspenseful I hope this helps you. Let me know what you think. And keep up the good work! Bill S. Runamuck’s face twisted into a revolting smile as it drew across his lips; and then as he ...
by SFNovelwriter
Thu Feb 09, 2006 1:43 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: Walking Alone
Replies: 10
Views: 3924

spooky?

Spooky Katie isn't so spooky, only deep and thoughful.
by SFNovelwriter
Tue Feb 07, 2006 2:48 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: The Kiss
Replies: 4
Views: 2527

The Kiss

The Kiss. Hearts beating as one. Hands fumbling to make undone. Eyes locked, focused, and searching Is this the one? Souls burning. Bodies yearning At last! A brush of tender lips. Send shivers of desire Stoking an inner fire As love's embers, begin to rise Warm, succulent, wet and sweet Perfume and...
by SFNovelwriter
Fri Feb 03, 2006 1:06 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Simply the beginning
Replies: 5
Views: 4303

You have a great start here!

Hello, my grammar is not the best either so please forgive me on that point. I like the story it has the makings of a good one! Is it to be a novel? Well I thought the opening was good just a bit choppy, so I re did part of it look it over and see what you think, use what you want toss the rest. If ...
by SFNovelwriter
Fri Feb 03, 2006 9:50 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Does this work?
Replies: 2
Views: 3116

Need some help

Hello! I read through your story quickly and it has the makings of a good story. Are you just doing a short story here or a book? I need some explanations in order to give you some help. For instance you write Old Woman and Converstation etc, may I ask why? Is this just to help you? It confused me, ...