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by SFNovelwriter
Tue Jan 17, 2006 8:07 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: I Want To Believe
Replies: 5
Views: 2516

The Quest

The quest for the truth, the quest for knowledge, the famous question, why? Well you have put it all here in one nice and neat package and me us all wonder. So if you can do that, you can do anything...in writing at least :D Keep up deep writing, it give us deep thoughts to ponder over.
by SFNovelwriter
Tue Jan 17, 2006 8:01 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: ErRatic - chapter one/part one
Replies: 13
Views: 8549

Interesting.

I found BMAT's comments interesting, some I agree with. However, my suggestion of descriptions was a suggetion to give the reader something, in the story we have to know (or it would be nice to know) Who Emma is? Young, old, white, black, something, most stories give us something. And a Pro Log usua...
by SFNovelwriter
Mon Jan 16, 2006 7:07 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: True Love
Replies: 7
Views: 3682

Ain't dreams great?

It is said dreams give us a message. In this case the message was love, what a great dream. Keep up the good stuff. And keep writing!
by SFNovelwriter
Mon Jan 16, 2006 7:03 pm
Forum: Poetry
Topic: Upon a Star
Replies: 3
Views: 2052

Upon a Star

Upon a star. Lovers gaze. Lonesome people pray. A million wishes, Upon a star. Rivers of tears, have been shed. Countless years have been lost, And with them, Love was the cost. To many lovers afraid to take a chance, Simply look to the heavens, And wish for romance, Upon a star. So do not dream, a ...
by SFNovelwriter
Mon Jan 16, 2006 5:46 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: ErRatic - chapter one/part one
Replies: 13
Views: 8549

Wow

Hello: The writing is more then good it's excellet! But the story is choppy and loses me quickly and I know why. First the Prologue should be the beginning of the book, chapter 1 not a Prologue. You should drop the She's and start off with Emma, then give some descriptions of Emma, how tall, eye col...
by SFNovelwriter
Mon Jan 16, 2006 5:24 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Unnamed work... Needs harsh (but honest) opinions
Replies: 13
Views: 9828

Very Good stuff

Hello: I agree with Bmat's assessement, and also with some of what ND had to say. Yes in a novel you want to hook people in the first few paragraphs. A lot of what you have written could come after a prologue that describes what is going on, the war, why they are leaving etc. Or you could even make ...
by SFNovelwriter
Wed Jan 04, 2006 3:00 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Extract, need opinions.
Replies: 8
Views: 5223

Ambition

A book ambitious? Nonsense, writers write. Give it a whirl go as far as you can, you can get help here and on other sites. I said that once, gee can't do it, but tried it and have written about 12 novels so far. They all need work but hey I did it. I just need to clean mine up and well go to the nex...
by SFNovelwriter
Wed Jan 04, 2006 11:58 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Dragonite Wars: Chapter 2
Replies: 6
Views: 4494

About chapter 2

Hello I agree alot with what maincomputer said. First you need to give us more on this great leader, why exactly was he away? Why did he come back? Secondly most people just do not walk up to people and begin talking to them, and stop traffic and hold a quick press conference, as Mr. I did. He shoul...
by SFNovelwriter
Tue Jan 03, 2006 4:08 pm
Forum: Television
Topic: Original Battlestar Galactica
Replies: 5
Views: 4568

Original Battlestar Galactica

Hello everyone! I am a fan of the first Battlestar Galactica, I loved it as much or more then Star Wars. It seemed to touch government and the world as it really is. I mean in the movie, the liberal media and government fell for a peace plan by an enemy they had been fighting for years and who sudde...
by SFNovelwriter
Tue Jan 03, 2006 3:51 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Extract, need opinions.
Replies: 8
Views: 5223

A spot of tea?

Nice, witty and it read well, the grammar, punctuation is not perfect so I can't help there. The story is off to a great start and it takes our lead character from in a funk putting up with a crazy fool to raising an eyebrow and wondering what the heck? So now you have hooked the reader like the cha...
by SFNovelwriter
Tue Jan 03, 2006 3:39 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: TEDOD
Replies: 7
Views: 4798

ahhh

You write like me put it down on paper and fix it later! I also have the grammar problem, but the story was good! I don't know where it is going or the point as it was not revealed. But this part of your story works, yes it could use a little cleaning up but it read well! That is all important, I co...
by SFNovelwriter
Tue Jan 03, 2006 3:26 pm
Forum: Meet and Greet
Topic: Hi from Australia
Replies: 12
Views: 7635

Welcome

Thanks for joining and enjoy, there is so much here to see, and read, and some of it very good! It's good to see how such a site can attract those from all over the world.