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Post by InvisibleRabbit »

Your eyes only see what you can believe
Your mind believes only what you can percieve
Your mind creates the lies you live
Your life ends up and empty seive
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Another thought provoking poem. Is the last line as you intended? I am not sure about the negative ending of one's life. Isn't everyone deceived by their mind? Is everyone's life empty?

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