Poetry Doesn't Deserve This Prescription

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Poetry Doesn't Deserve This Prescription

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Poetry Doesn't Deserve This Prescription

You can remember, can't you?
Everything that's false, nothing that's true:
On so many legal ones and the ones that aren't;
I deserved it, I can remember that skull you tripped on.
And so on...

Some times ago, some scents never told ya
How it really gets harder any sec and/or shivering leaves
Are out of focus? Just the faces inside this blur
Of ours, beasty and feasty flesh are salted a bit
Too much...

Anyways, you cannot reanimate me anymore,
my bones are sore, my boredom's gore, so
What will you do?
What is it expected of a tiny lil' tinkerbell,
My Muse so damn cliched, you're forgotten,
Twirled inside my despair and /or stench
I cannot type anymore.
Nor can I spell...

GET BACK FROM VERMIN CITY!!!
GET THE HELL BACK FROM V. CITY MY DEAR...
"Sickness, insanity and death were the angels that surrounded my cradle and they have followed me throughout my life." -Edvard Munch-

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Post by clknaps »

Interesting style. Poetry is not my specialty, so I'll let others comment on the details. Thank you for sharing it with us and welcome to the forum.

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Post by RHFay »

Hello shootbootleg!

This one sounds rather spur of the moment. Is it? There's nothing wrong with that, it gives it a "sudden flash of inspiration" feel. It's more like a poem that's a train of thought (or emotion), rather than one that tells a story.

One suggestion, I wouldn't use and/or. It seems to distract from the language. It's a bit too "business-like".

Cheers!
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Post by Ariel »

Sorry Shootbootleg, I don't get it. :?

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