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Postby EchoingVoices » Sun Jul 10, 2005 10:44 pm

...well I write about things that happen to me.. my friend has been hitting on my first love.. I know it isn't all intellectual... but people enjoy it.. Here.

Two Years Versus Eieght
Is It Worth It?
The Piece Of Lamb You Want On Your Plate?
Say It Isn't So, Don't Leave Your Mark,
Stop It Now,
It Is Killing My Heart
The Years Of Playground Fun,
All These Years Soon Be Undone,
For What? A Night Of Pleasure, A Knife In My Back?
You'll Get Yours, This Friend You'll Lack,
And To The Girl I Loved For So Many Years,
All The Time We've Shared,
And All Of These Tears,
You Throw Them Away For A Go With A Friend,
How Hopeless You Are,
And To THink I called You My Godsend,
I've Met Pets With More Respect,
And Insects With More Intellect,
You Care, Sure You Do, Killing Me With Aid,
These Feelings Have Disapeered, They Took This Long To Fade,
Worthless... Hopeless, What Am I?
...I Cry Over You One Last Time... Just One More,
Forget Us, Forget Him and Forget The Whore,
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Postby Raye » Mon Jul 11, 2005 2:45 pm

a little harsh but I think it really captured the feeling you were trying to get across. like an angry kind of sad. and you put an extra e in eight. but, hey, i dont pretend to be a spelling genius either. good job! keep up the excellent work!

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