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A sparrow flutters, flower to flower
A hawk hovers, wings full of power
A roadway stretches, both lanes empty
A shoreline crashes, waves from the sea

The sparrow perches, eying an insect
The hawk's eyes sharpen, its sight-lines perfect
The highway's calm, its blacktop weathered
The waves still break, their foam feathered

The sparrow tenses, prepared to pounce
The hawk's wings fold, it drops to trounce
The road sits empty, but for a rabbit
The water washes, as if by habit

The sparrow leaps, and drops to grab
The bug that walks, a leaf to nab
But focus lost when it is caught
Its hunger then was dearly bought

The hawk adjusts its fall and drops
To side-slip as its target hops
But as it grabs the rabbit's neck
Both are crushed by a driving wreck

The car on highway, driver shocked
Swerves and twists and hits a rock
Smashing bird and bug and then
Right to the sea it enters in

The ocean waves, they pound the shore
And wash the blood forever more.
Last edited by aldan on Fri Mar 16, 2007 2:31 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by Neurolanis »

Well Neuro suspects that Aldan knows that he is a good poet all ready, but he will still say, nice poem Aldan! :)

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Truly, this is one that I pretty much threw together. I had gotten the idea for it while at work, and I had to work on it between phone calls and other such things, which meant that I had to sort of piece it together. When I started it, though, I had no idea where it would lead. I'm happy that it led me where it did.
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Post by Caltana »

Good poem Aldan. Oh its nice to hear a poem that rhymes for a change! :)
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Well, that's because I'm practicing, because I'm trying to get tuned up to write an Epic poem, and what does that need? Couplets, rhyming couplets, of course!
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Good job aldan!

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good job homie! it was interesting, at first i didn't know where it would lead either, but very kool after it all came together. buz-Zing!
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I have a few others posted further down the list. I haven't written any others recently due to my "Holiday" work schedule and the drain it's put on my creative side.
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