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Howling Silence

Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 10:21 am
by aldan
Quiet rage
Roars in silence

Ringing shots
Paint the morn

Bloody streaks
Dripping holes

Screams of pain
Crying fear

Bravery flashes
Timed by triggers

Single blast
Shuts the door.

Posted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 7:18 pm
by Talon Sinnah
And the usual Aldan confusing poem.


I tell you what let me play through this in my head and get back to you sometime. :) Life is confusing right now. :?

Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 5:43 am
by Ariel
Whew, I thought I was the only one confused. I get the first line. Is the rest about gun shots???

"Single blast shuts the door" The final shot ends life? What? I'm so confused.

Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 11:58 am
by aldan
Think of VT, and what the guy did.

Posted: Sun Apr 29, 2007 10:32 am
by RHFay
Hi Aldan!

Well, I'm not so much confused by this as I'm disturbed by it. I seemed to understand your intentions, especially in light of recent events. It's not necessarily a bad thing when poetry is disturbing; it can stir many different emotions. I personally like writing dark horror poems.

If your using this poem to help express your emotions regarding recent events, then I applaude your efforts. That's one of the purposes of poetry, at least in my humble opinion.

Cheers!

Posted: Mon May 21, 2007 11:15 pm
by clknaps
Is paint the morn meaning short for morning or do you mourn?

CLK

Posted: Tue May 22, 2007 9:45 am
by aldan
I used the word morn, meaning 'morning', but also meant it to give the impression of 'mourn', since that was the result of the 'painting'.

Posted: Tue May 22, 2007 10:16 am
by RHFay
aldan wrote:I used the word morn, meaning 'morning', but also meant it to give the impression of 'mourn', since that was the result of the 'painting'.


I was hoping that you had a double meaning there. Nice word play! That's the sort of stuff a lot of editors look for. They want you to use the language in unique and interesting ways.

Cheers!

Posted: Tue May 22, 2007 4:41 pm
by aldan
Thank you. It's something I've been working with for awhile, and I like the results when I come up with some interesting 'double entendres' and whatnot. It gives me a feeling that there's more 'meat' available for the reader to partake in if they wish to truly absorb the poem.