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Musick

Postby aldan » Mon Jul 18, 2005 10:32 pm

Short white lines blend
To one blurring streak
As small reflectors keep the
Bump bump bump beat.
Looking at the winding tach
And listening to engine and music
Scream in harmony
Fighting the wheel in myopic,
Leaf-stirring splendor,
When with a shining flash
The rhythm stops counting
And a metal-rending crash
Ends the trip to senility
In a wail of sirens.
"It is better to keep your mouth shut and to appear stupid than
to open it and remove all doubt."
---Mark Twain
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Postby Neurolanis » Wed Jul 20, 2005 3:21 pm

I like it. :)
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Postby Magus » Mon Oct 17, 2005 7:31 pm

Yes. It has a very good rhythm to it and you make great use of onomatopoeias.
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