Comments on my efforts at writing

[SerinitysChild]

While I appreciate those who've suffered through my attempts at writing, I've been posting here for a bit of feedback. A few suggestions, a bit of correction, perhaps even a bit of help. I know my grammar leaves something to be desired and perhaps my ideas on the flow of the story could use a tweet or two, however, how can I know these things if no one is willing to comment?

I'll continue to post, in the hope that one day someone will help point out my mistakes.

Oh, and as a side note, I"m currently looking for an agent. The first book is, in my opinion, complete, ready for publication.
Book two should be done by the end of the year.

Again, thanks for all the reading.

Serinity's Child

[The Master]

I haven't been ignoring you, I've just been busy

[nightlock]

We all have.

Also, maybe a note of interest for the future of specvision; forum layout does not invite to read large swathes of text. At one point I resorted to copy-pasting the text to a text editor for a more suitable text layout. Forum sizes are perfect for short posts and alinea's rarely consist of more than three sentences, compared to which the text up for criticsm seems massive, even if it's just a single page in a text editor.

[who me]

I did not wish to say unkind things.
short posts would help.
Alan was really the man to go to for grammar . (RIP)