Howling Silence

[aldan]

Quiet rage
Roars in silence

Ringing shots
Paint the morn

Bloody streaks
Dripping holes

Screams of pain
Crying fear

Bravery flashes
Timed by triggers

Single blast
Shuts the door.

[Talon Sinnah]

And the usual Aldan confusing poem.


I tell you what let me play through this in my head and get back to you sometime. Life is confusing right now.

[Ariel]

Whew, I thought I was the only one confused. I get the first line. Is the rest about gun shots???

"Single blast shuts the door" The final shot ends life? What? I'm so confused.

[aldan]

Think of VT, and what the guy did.

[RHFay]

Hi Aldan!

Well, I'm not so much confused by this as I'm disturbed by it. I seemed to understand your intentions, especially in light of recent events. It's not necessarily a bad thing when poetry is disturbing; it can stir many different emotions. I personally like writing dark horror poems.

If your using this poem to help express your emotions regarding recent events, then I applaude your efforts. That's one of the purposes of poetry, at least in my humble opinion.

Cheers!

[clknaps]

Is paint the morn meaning short for morning or do you mourn?

CLK

[aldan]

I used the word morn, meaning 'morning', but also meant it to give the impression of 'mourn', since that was the result of the 'painting'.

[RHFay]

I used the word morn, meaning 'morning', but also meant it to give the impression of 'mourn', since that was the result of the 'painting'.

I was hoping that you had a double meaning there. Nice word play! That's the sort of stuff a lot of editors look for. They want you to use the language in unique and interesting ways.

Cheers!

[aldan]

Thank you. It's something I've been working with for awhile, and I like the results when I come up with some interesting 'double entendres' and whatnot. It gives me a feeling that there's more 'meat' available for the reader to partake in if they wish to truly absorb the poem.