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by HulloKitty202
Tue Jan 31, 2006 8:59 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Simply the beginning
Replies: 5
Views: 4448

Thanks everyone for your feedback! I'm glad you liked the story.

As I read your critiques I found some " :shock: " errors. Reigning and reining! Gaaaaaaaaah!

I'm continuing to write in the Bluestone univerese as I call it and I hope to post soon!

Thanks again!
by HulloKitty202
Tue Jan 31, 2006 8:49 pm
Forum: Suggestions and Ideas
Topic: Needing a 'villain'
Replies: 18
Views: 15447

Hmmmm the scariest villain for me? Aliens have always creeped me out, especially the "body snatcher" ones :lol:
by HulloKitty202
Sun Jan 29, 2006 2:32 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Unnamed work... Needs harsh (but honest) opinions
Replies: 13
Views: 10124

I like it. You really descibe the people of Pavax well, and especially, the Liacht.

The other posters identified most of the (minor) problems in the piece.

It's good, and I look forward to reading more!
by HulloKitty202
Tue Jan 24, 2006 9:02 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Simply the beginning
Replies: 5
Views: 4448

Simply the beginning

Hi all, I've been writing a story for quite some time now and while I think its going in the right (Or "write" :D ) direction I would appreciate the feedback on how the story flows. Its long, I grant you, and incomplete. My story basically revolves around a boy who loses his father at an early age, ...
by HulloKitty202
Wed Dec 07, 2005 7:47 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: The beginning inferno
Replies: 4
Views: 3610

Please post critiscm and advice!
by HulloKitty202
Tue Dec 06, 2005 9:02 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: The beginning inferno
Replies: 4
Views: 3610

The beginning inferno

A very, very rough copy of the prolouge to a book I started after nanowrimo Steward Blinn pressed his face into the warm carpet, and tried to understand the shadows above him. He had been called hear by his master, to listen to his lord’s audience with his guest. For what reason he did not know, but...
by HulloKitty202
Tue Dec 06, 2005 9:40 am
Forum: Games
Topic: EverQuest II anyone play?
Replies: 2
Views: 7309

EverQuest II anyone play?

I think the wordd "everquest" creates some unfair bias but its truly a great game, and its made even better by the new expansion.

Does anyone play?
by HulloKitty202
Wed Oct 12, 2005 7:18 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: Somthing is Coming
Replies: 1
Views: 2446

Somthing is Coming

I keep building on my "demon" story and I cant stop! North Eastern Romania The four men had arrived earlier that day, in a new car one that had never been seen by the villagers. It had come nosily up the twisted path, spitting rocks and tearing gouges in the mud. They had pulled directly up to the a...
by HulloKitty202
Fri Sep 16, 2005 7:55 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: Things in the Night (Chapter 2)
Replies: 3
Views: 2909

C'mon guys tell me what you think! Please!
by HulloKitty202
Tue Sep 13, 2005 8:02 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: Things in the Night (Chapter 2)
Replies: 3
Views: 2909

I was kinda worried about my last sentence in which the cop says something about vampires ('scuse me for not remembering exactly!) but I just wanted to clarify that the demon theme is completely different from vampires. The reason the cop says "vampires" is kind of like a main stream culture thing, ...
by HulloKitty202
Tue Sep 13, 2005 7:38 pm
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: Things in the Night (Chapter 2)
Replies: 3
Views: 2909

Things in the Night (Chapter 2)

This chapter isnt quite done yet, but I thought it was going so well I decided to post it. (And I'm working on another story, I decided to take a little break) Curious about what you guys think Theres no motive or other stuff yet but there will be. (Just a hint, this aint an accident) Here goes: “De...
by HulloKitty202
Tue Sep 13, 2005 9:00 am
Forum: SF/F Short Stories and Novel Excerpts
Topic: Things in the Night
Replies: 4
Views: 3615

Glad you liked it, the more I wrote it the more I like it too. And for the Demons I was thinking that they were created by human hate and pain. So they are created by humans and loath them for it. Kinda fits into the activation thing.