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by clknaps
Sun Jan 29, 2006 11:19 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: After the Prophet, Chptr 1 (Feedback Requested)
Replies: 4
Views: 4991

After the Prophet, Chptr 1 (Feedback Requested)

Chapter 1, After the Prophet The gray-haired priest named Amos rushed along the rocky path toward his salvation. He turned a sharp left corner and saw what he was searching for, the north wall sat across the only pass through the mountains less than a mile ahead. He was gasping for breath now and ev...
by clknaps
Sun Jan 29, 2006 11:16 pm
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Feedback Requested on Forward of Fantasy Book
Replies: 7
Views: 7032

Thanks for the feedback

Hello gang, thanks so much for taking the time to give me some feedback. I will try to answer everyone's questions here in one post. SF Novelwriter : I agree that it's more like chapter one than a prologue, but here's the catch, when you send it in to publishers, they only want the first 4 chapters,...
by clknaps
Tue Jan 24, 2006 9:08 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Grammar
Replies: 35
Views: 25011

For help with grammar, go to http://www.noveladvice.com/resources/
and click on grammar. There are about 20 sites that can help.
Hope this helps.
clk
by clknaps
Tue Jan 24, 2006 8:59 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Scenario Salad
Replies: 4
Views: 3981

The second scenario has the most pull for me.
by clknaps
Tue Jan 24, 2006 8:55 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Unnamed work... Needs harsh (but honest) opinions
Replies: 13
Views: 10124

Re: Unnamed work... Needs harsh (but honest) opinions

--- Peering through the dirty (would choose another word here, what made the windows dirty? Dirt, dust, grime?) windows of the tavern, Jocelyn could only barely make out the figure of a Liacht clansman. Though distorted through the glass, Jocelyn could see the graceful curve of his four hoofs, the r...
by clknaps
Tue Jan 24, 2006 8:34 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: ErRatic - chapter one/part one
Replies: 13
Views: 8820

Outstanding beginning, very gripping.
by clknaps
Tue Jan 24, 2006 8:22 am
Forum: Critique and Advice
Topic: Feedback Requested on Forward of Fantasy Book
Replies: 7
Views: 7032

Feedback Requested on Forward of Fantasy Book

Hello gang, I'm new and would appreciate your comments/opinions on the forward to my fantasy novel. ~~~~~~~ Sir Marcus Wolfe, newly knighted, and the current captain of two hundred battle-ready soldiers, stood on the pristine white wall surveying the conditions around him. It had been a tense three ...